This poem was written in 1916, during the "painful disintegration of H.D.'s marriage to Richard Aldington." I submit that it can be read on the most obvious biographical level as H.D.'s personal cry of rage and despair against an unfaithful husband (also a poet and once a mentor) who had drawn her, like Orpheus had Eurydice, toward happiness, only to turn and reject her. We can also read this work as a willful expression of this "imagist" poet's reaction to her relationship to D.H. Lawrence, with whom she had been in close contact for years as artists, and with whom, it has been widely suggested, that an affair of the heart as well as the pen from 1914-17 led her to despair of him as well (Sword, Helen, "Orpheus and Eurydice in the Twentieth Century: Lawrence, H.D. and the Poetics of the Turn," Twentieth Century Literature, 1989, Winter, 35:4, 407-28)   

I <Eurydice does not speak in the the usual mythic accounts. Here we hear her own voice!
<Shortly after her wedding to Orpheus, the mythic bride Eurydice walked in a meadow and was stung and killed by a viper.
<In Eurydice's mind's eye, the "live souls" live on the earth, at least at this point.
<Having been relegated to the underworld, she has slept, and HAD, as we will see, ALMOST come to accept her lot.
< So live souls are equated in the heroine's mind with flowers, the vehicle for such a consciousness that life on earth might afford her.
<Here she speaks her mind. No longer silent, as she has been in most mythic accounts, she has become a willfull heroine. She accuses Orpheus of "arrogance" and "ruthlessness." This is contrasted with the mythic account, where at the very worst Orpheus is portrayed as admirable and ambitious in his motivations to save her. (Sword 408).
<We see that perhaps he might have been "arrogant" to try to save her, for she begins to suggest that she was becoming accustomed to her place in Hades, that she did not desire to be pulled back out. But "ruthless" is an accusation one makes in extreme anger.
<That she is "swept" rather than "pulled back into" by the Hadean forces, or "pushed" or "sent" suggests the insidious ease with which "arrogance" and "ruthlessness" can perform the devastation she describes.
<Lichens: plants that consist of a symbiotic association of algae (usually green) and fungi (OED). If algae, which is green and formed partly by light, then is there light present where she is?  Why are they dead?
<Notice that "dead" is used a lot in this and other sections to describe not the agony of her existence, but the repose of impending acceptance.
<Orpheus had enticed her, as the story goes, with the prospect of regaining life "above the earth" once more; but whatever hope there had been for that future has been expunged. We begin to see the "ruthlessness" she talks about.
<For her, living "unconscious" in the Underworld is better than living with the vain hope of getting out.
<She's almost in a state of acceptance that she could endure eternity without hope of seeing the "upper earth" again
<Here begins her diatribe of what might have been had Orpheus' "arrogance" that he should save her and the "ruthlessness" of his fatal regard had never taken place.
<She was building on acceptance of her plight, up to the time Orpheus decided that he would attempt to outwit death and get her back.
<In death there is a solemn contentment, a lack of turmoil-- turmoil which Orpheus has again raised in his futile attempt to save her, a transgression against her will.
<"had forgot"=would have forgotten (Orpheus); We might surmise that Orpheus would never have forgotten Eurydice, but that she could forget him; A bit of a blow to his ego, to be sure.   

II <"Black" symbolizes in the traditional myth, and in the case of Eurydice herself, an attribute of a negative role, a woman as death, as "dark continent," which Freud "found so threatening and so irresistable" (Sword 408). In this way, by reducing Eurydice to a core of unattainable darkness, Orpheus' transformation into a great poet thus occurs only over her "dead body," so to speak.
<a foreshadowing contrast to the colors she mentions about life in the section dealing with flowers. There are no significant colors in Hades, she laments.
<The first of many "why's." When one asks why, she is essentially in denial of the fact that it exists. (Why did he do that? Well, he did it--what are you going to do?) She is struggling here for acceptance of her plight. In the meantime she must work it out by speaking.
<woman as death = woman as nothingness
<Hesitation is a gesture of doubt. What did Orpheus doubt? Perhaps that he could not have become a great poet without Eurydice, whose death in the myth is the catalyst of his own inspiration.
<. First of many references to the face, hers and his.
 <His face (above) bends to hers (below)--a gesture of condescension, of "arrogance"
<"crossed" is used interestingly here. It may mean the light of Orpheus' pretentions that he could outwit death and save her; or the false light which "trangresses" against the freedom he has dangled in front of her spirit, and then, in the "turn," removes.
<This seems sarcastic, for she is a being in darkness. Were he to see the light of his face in hers would mean that she is in the light, that there is a connection between the two of them, a yearning for him as a submissive bride, which there is no longer.
<She has connected fire ('flame") with the Underworld; now she has connected it with him. He is losing the true light in her own eyes, and is actually growing closer in reality to her perception of that which she is trying to escape (the darkness).
<Note that when she uses this word, we could easily substitute the word "pretense," which gives a wonderful cutting irony against the backdrop of what seems like true passion for Eurydice by Orpheus, which it is not.
<a reaction, which produces something--in this case, flowers.
<Here she begins to equate flowers with the upper-world, Orpheus world, LIFE, for which she has longed. In place of this existence, Eurydice yearns for earthly beauty. For her, flowers symbolize the epitome of earthly existence.
<She is stuck here, though.
< a symbol of the earthly sky. Crocuses are also among the very first flowers of springtime.
<flowers of the sun, celestial faces and spirits above the earth
< So we have sky, sun wind, all of which are beyond her intrinsic grasp now.
<She is the vision of woman as inertia (motionlessness) whereas Orpheus is the symbol of movement, dancing about and singing with his harp.
<the sum of all colors 
III< She links this substance to the fatal motion Orpheus has made.

<"Saffron is the product of several species of crocus, especially of the blue-flowered saffron crocus...native to Greece and Asia Minor. The commercial product consists of the stigma and upper portion of the style, which are collected as or shortly after the flower opens" (Moldenke, Harold N., Plants of the Bible, New York, 1958, p. 87).
The stigma and style are components of the flower's reproductive mechanism. That Eurydice should compare Orpheus to saffron suggests that he is, like commercially produced saffron, pulverized and used thus. To be sure, her comparison is a part of the heroine's own Orphic "turn," where her own conception and experience with flowers so emasculates him who first turned on her. Notice this line in his letter as nothing less than an affirmation of H.D.'s closing to the poem. I do not know whether H.D. knew of this letter to Gray going into her poem, but the parallel in thought is indeed startling. It underscores the point that, on a sort of telepathic, empathic, emotional and perhaps literary level, that they --she and Lawrence- could have been proximally compatible catalysts for each other's work.
That Eurydice is able to differentiate between parts of the crocus and its products as a component of a conceptual working order to her floral paradigm of "living" shows that she indeed has more power for her own redemption than the classical myth would ever have afforded her. That is, she may have been ripped from the earth, but Orpheus has been ripped from his own integral self, from the flower itself which to her is the symbol of life on the earth. The delicacy of the flowers juxtaposed with the subtextual allusion to Orpheus' own violent spiritual upheaval create in these elements a powerful method of underscoring her point that she is really better off than Orpheus.
<Like Orpheus' face, the saffron bends its face towards Hades. Her sarcasm here is clear: Orpheus is jaundiced with the cowardice to be his own man. He has relied on her demise as the vehicle for his own art.
<As a result of his fatal regard, all life has left her.Flowers are a symbol of life for her.
< There is no way to return to the earth. The flowers are out of reach, and so life is colorless, a bunch of "dead cinders upon a moss of ash."
<The Freudian notion of the female persona is known as the "dark continent." In contrast with the colors of the flowers which salvifically afford life meaning for her, she now lives in colorless nothingness.
<Had Orpheus forgotten her, as she now wishes he would have, she thinks she would have been able to accept the eternal "nothingness" which would have been her eternal peace. 
IV <The now elusive sky isembodied  by the blue crocuses which, ironically, produce the best saffron.

<Note how this idea of loss is emphasized by separating it into its own poignant line.
<Big "if" here, signifying what might have been. As usual, her embodiment of the sky (and everything else "above the earth") lies in the notion of flowers.
< Orpheus has aroused in her a thirst for life, which has made her existence now all the more unbearable.
<A list of what might have been follows.
<That she desires the "whole" that life has to afford, and that she repeats herself, demonstrates that for her, a half-measure of anything will avail her nothing.
<The golden crocuses represent the early, celestial light which accompanies springtime.
<The red crocuses breathed into her the very heart of the earth in the infancy of vernal rebirth.
< She might have been reborn into the love of Orpheus, as saffron is born up from the earth.
<She could have withstood being sent here again anyway. A moment of life, of flowers, of breathing the fragrance of life again, of being among the "live souls" would have sufficed even in the face of the possibility that she would again return to Hades. 
V <She repeats herself. He has repeated and failed, showing that perhaps he needs these points driven home. She knows to whom she is talking.

<Now she's being as condescending as can be--by appealing to the classical stereotype of the male reason, she sums up everything thus far, as a good textbook would do.
<You do not need me, do you? Or do you?
<Arrogant, self-centered Orpheus has his own agenda for a presence.
<Some critics believe she is also referring to her relationship with D. H. Lawrence here.
H.D.'s interest in D.H. Lawrence probably had as much to do with his forceful personality and what she evidently recognized as his symbolic Orpheus-like role...than with his accomplishments as a novelist or poet (Sword 411). What, though, is the evidence that such interest would evoke the need or desire to pen "Eurydice?" In a 1916 letter that almost certainly refers to Lawrence she admits the Lawrence played a most potent role in her life. In the letter she confides to her friend John Cournos that "There is a power in this person to kill me" (Sword 414): ...I mean literally. For the spiritual vision, his thoughts, his distant passion has given me, I thank God--because vision is God! I thank God! But...there is another side--if he comes too near, I am afraid for myself! I do not mean physically--...I mean in a more subtle way." ( from a Letter to John Cournos, 31 Oct., 1916. Printed in "Art and Ardor in World War One: Selected Letters from H.D to John Cournos," Iowa Review, 16, No. 3 (Fall 1986), 139-40).
It may be that the arrogant power of Lawrence's personality, his character, drove H.D. to write, to speak with the voice of defiance that the Eurydice of her work hereafter assumes: ("I tell you this:").
<Here is the turning point from her despair.
< She begins to execute an Orphic "turn" of her own, a "Eurydicean" turn away from patriarchal convention.
<Her determination to reign in Hades if she cannot write poetry on earth is not the most satisfying solution to her dilemma. But she does show courage. 
VI <Rather than accepting her fate in silence, she cries out defiantly against her oppressor, where the negative space of marginalization has become a source of power.

<By internalizing her love for life, she recreates the flowers she longs for in herself.
< She could withstand even more than this, for she now has her integrity and dignity, regardless of what Orpheus does. 
VII <the world of myself, of imagination, and integrity

<This fervour requires no extranous force or "live soul" for its validation.
< This refers to the light from within, rather than from without, from earth or from Orpheus.
<Her spirit is not dead; it has a consciousness which cannot be extinguished by any god or mortal.
 <"Small" is infinitely larger than "nothingness."
<This is a most apocalyptic final verse with its imagery of hell as a red rose, showing that she has conquered the misery of hell by her mere thoughts and attitudes. She is saying that her internal flowers are powerful indeed.
The last lines suggest that perhaps Lawrence looked to H.D. less for poetic influence...than for some "more subtle" form of inspiration and initiation (Sword 415). When Cecil Gray, "Cyril Vane" of Bid Me to Live, wrote a letter to Lawrence in 1917 accusing Lawrence of "allowing himself to become the object of a kind of esoteric female cult," Lawrence replied in defense:
"As for me and my "women," I know what they are and aren't...Your hatred of me...is your cleavage to a world of knowledge and being which you ought to forsake, or die. And my "women," Esther Andrews, Hilda Aldington [H.D.] etc., represent, in an impure and unproud, subservient, cringing, bad fashion, I admit--but represent one the less the threshold of a new world, or underworld, of knowledge and being...The old world must burst, the underworld must be open and whole, new world..."(Sword 417).